tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1112724878128717335.post4989930729730828763..comments2023-07-24T09:42:25.750-06:00Comments on ENGLISH 189 BLOG: PLAIN ENGLISH, March 27thVeronica Baighttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14699213044999575738noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1112724878128717335.post-56970003486720311272009-04-09T16:17:00.000-06:002009-04-09T16:17:00.000-06:00Irena: You're on the right track. Note that "in or...Irena: You're on the right track. Note that "in order to" is a wordy expression, and it's usually a good idea to avoid verb phrases with "will"--usually the simple present tense works better.<BR/>Kelsey: Some good improvements.<BR/>Tammy: Yes, but now you've missed out some vital information--goals and objectives;-)Veronica Baighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14699213044999575738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1112724878128717335.post-36637316065957216412009-03-31T15:15:00.000-06:002009-03-31T15:15:00.000-06:00To achieve a clean lunchroom, all employees must d...To achieve a clean lunchroom, all employees must decide what they will be responsible for.Tammynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1112724878128717335.post-53559683986883857912009-03-31T09:35:00.000-06:002009-03-31T09:35:00.000-06:00To keep the lunchroom clean, everyone must decide ...To keep the lunchroom clean, everyone must decide on their own goals and objectives for which they will be responsible.Kelseynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1112724878128717335.post-10337166409604180942009-03-30T19:19:00.000-06:002009-03-30T19:19:00.000-06:00In order to keep lunchroom clean, the management h...In order to keep lunchroom clean, the management has set up the target for employees to specify what they will be responsible for.Irenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04018355446613074836noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1112724878128717335.post-27274111713014841742009-03-28T17:26:00.000-06:002009-03-28T17:26:00.000-06:00Janine: Good--you got rid of a lot of clutter.Marg...Janine: Good--you got rid of a lot of clutter.<BR/>Margaret: You're on the right track here, but you have left some wordy expressions.Veronica Baighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14699213044999575738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1112724878128717335.post-44221134080668696252009-03-28T10:31:00.000-06:002009-03-28T10:31:00.000-06:00To help keep the lunchroom clean, management has a...To help keep the lunchroom clean, management has asked every employee to decide what he or she wants to be responsible for.Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08380110503836645568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1112724878128717335.post-43668533153531993592009-03-28T09:09:00.000-06:002009-03-28T09:09:00.000-06:00All employees must take responsibility for their g...All employees must take responsibility for their goals and objectives to achieve lunchroom cleanliness.Janinenoreply@blogger.com