Sunday, July 27, 2008

PLAIN ENGLISH, July 27th, 2009

span style="font-style:italic;">Writing clear, direct English is particularly important in a business context. Please rewrite the following item; there are many different but correct ways of doing this.

We will be forwarding detailed instructions with regard to the humane disposal of the ants that have been trapped in the containers provided by staff; these instructions will be developed, distributed and posted by the Health and Wellness Committee.

Hint: Check Chapter 9 of Barron's Business English, and avoid using the passive voice and other wordy construction!


Ying Meng said...

The Health and Wellness Committee will develop detailed instructions with regards to the humane disposal of the ants provided by staff.

Veronica Baig said...

Ying: Most of this is good, but it reads as though the staff are providing the ants!