Writing clear, direct English is particularly important in a business context. Please rewrite the following item; there are many different but correct ways of doing this.
In essence, it was my position as administrative assistant to ease the increasingly onerous responsibilities from the shoulders of my boss by seeing that the details were never overlooked and that deadlines were always met in a timely manner.
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As administrative assistant, it is my responsibility to ensure that deadlines are met in a timely manner; and that no details are overlooked.
As administrative assistant, it was my job to ease my boss’ increased responsibilities by making sure details were not missed, and deadlines were met.
Tammy: A big improvement, but do pay attention to the punctuation;-)
Margaret: Also good--can you avoid using the passive voice?
As administrative assistant it is my responsibility to ensure that our deadlines are met, and no details overlooked.
Tammy: A huge improvement, but still there is a punctuation issue;-)
My responsibility as an administrative assistant was to make sure that deadlines were always met in a timely manner.
Irena: Yes, but is there any way to avoid the passive voice?
As administrative assistant, it is my responsibility to ensure that our deadlines are met and no details are overlooked.
As an administrative assistant it is my responsibility to make sure that deadlines were always met in a timely manner.
Tammy and Irena: These are both good, but you both still have the passive. Can you avoid this?
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