Writing clear, direct English is particularly important in a business context. Please rewrite the following item; there are many different but correct ways of doing this.
In this day and age, it is of particular importance that each and every side of a business proposal be discussed by all concerned parties on account of the fact that all of these parties need to cooperate together to reach an agreed upon concensus and unity.
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It is of great importance that business proposals be discussed thoroughly by all parties, as they will have to cooperate together to reach consensus.
For a concensus to be reached, it is important the involved parties discuss all facets of a business proposal.
Nancy: There's some improvement here--can you get rid of the passive voice, and check for redundant words;-)
Kelsey: Even better--but you still have the passive voice, too;-)
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