Wednesday, June 18, 2008

PLAIN ENGLISH, June 18th

span style="font-style:italic;">Writing clear, direct English is particularly important in a business context. Please rewrite the following item; there are many different but correct ways of doing this.

In view of the fact that receipt of the shipment of the ant entrapment devices has been delayed due to an unfortunate oversight in the Purchasing Dept., the committee undertakes to provide all the necessary step-by-step instructions for the on-site development of the necessary devices, including a list of all required materials.

3 comments:

Ying Meng said...

Since the ant entrapment devices won't arrive as scheduled, the committee provides detailed instructions for developing the necessary devices, including a list of required materials.

Veronica Baig said...

Ying: That's a big improvement; can anyone else do more?

Irena said...

Since the shipment of the ant entrapment has been delayed, the committee decided to provide step-by-step instruction on how to make them as well the list of required material is included.